Dear Tykira I am overwhelmed by your poem, "America's System," because it truly demonstrates the frustrations of Americans when it comes to healthcare. The poor system failing our citizens is described in a simple yet captivating manner. One part of your poem that stands out to me is the tone. I think this is significant because it gives a voice to the million feeling the same way. The voice of angered people who just want to be cared for being ignored are voiced through your poem. Another part I enjoyed was phrases like "we cannot," "it will not," and "they will not." This stood out for me because of the lack of wanting better healthcare for American citizens by our government. Your poem reminds me of something that I made once. One time I helped make T-Shirts for the Epilepsy foundation my cousin was apart of. We were doing a 5 mile walk for epilepsy awareness and to protest against the countless children and adults that go without care because of lack of insurance and money for medical bills. Ever since I have been strong on advocating for better healthcare for the citizens of our country. Thanks for the poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next because your creativity has left me speechless. I have rerea you poem multiple times and loved it each time.
Dear Tykira I am overwhelmed by your poem, "America's System," because it truly demonstrates the frustrations of Americans when it comes to healthcare. The poor system failing our citizens is described in a simple yet captivating manner. One part of your poem that stands out to me is the tone. I think this is significant because it gives a voice to the million feeling the same way. The voice of angered people who just want to be cared for being ignored are voiced through your poem. Another part I enjoyed was phrases like "we cannot," "it will not," and "they will not." This stood out for me because of the lack of wanting better healthcare for American citizens by our government. Your poem reminds me of something that I made once. One time I helped make T-Shirts for the Epilepsy foundation my cousin was apart of. We were doing a 5 mile walk for epilepsy awareness and to protest against the countless children and adults that go without care because of lack of insurance and money for medical bills. Ever since I have been strong on advocating for better healthcare for the citizens of our country. Thanks for the poem. I look forward to seeing what you make next because your creativity has left me speechless. I have rerea you poem multiple times and loved it each time.
I am intrigued with your work of art because I find the topic very interesting. I liked the collages because they got your theme across.
Ramlahs collage stands out to me especially pregnancy at a price
Another part that I liked is everything worked together to get the message across
Thanks for your presentation . I look forward to seeing what you make next, because your quality of work is always exceeding expectations
I am really touched by each of the poems shown in this zine, I think all of the poems touch on the big idea and give a clear understanding about how y'all feel about the topic that was picked. I enjoyed the poems and I agree with the things that were said in them. great job.
Dear Jalia
I am very happy with your poem,"Hard Times" because of the use of space and repetition. I really love the added space you used in your poem. The repetition really helps your message sink into your poem. one part of of your that stands out to me is where you use repetition. I think this is very clever because I really think this helps convey your message further. I think reading it further helps the understand makes them feel a certain way. Another part that I liked was where you used space in your poem. This stood out to me because I think it's very unique. Your poem reminds me of something that I made once. One time I drew an image that related to this topic. It was a long time ago but I was inspired to draw it after hearing about a similar problem. Thanks for your poem. I look for what you make next, because your poem was really great. I loved how creative and unique it is and I definitely want to see more.
I am really touched by each of the poems shown in this zine, I think all of the poems touch on the big idea and give a clear understanding about how y'all feel about the topic that was picked. I enjoyed the poems and I agree with the things that were said in them. great job.
Dear Jalia
I am very happy with your poem,"Hard Times" because of the use of space and repetition. I really love the added space you used in your poem. The repetition really helps your message sink into your poem. one part of of your that stands out to me is where you use repetition. I think this is very clever because I really think this helps convey your message further. I think reading it further helps the understand makes them feel a certain way. Another part that I liked was where you used space in your poem. This stood out to me because I think it's very unique. Your poem reminds me of something that I made once. One time I drew an image that related to this topic. It was a long time ago but I was inspired to draw it after hearing about a similar problem. Thanks for your poem. I look for what you make next, because your poem was really great. I loved how creative and unique it is and I definitely want to see more.
I like the part in ramlahs poem where it says "What happens when the money goes away? It's like you were never there, now you're just like everyone else". Giving the implication that if you don't have money the healthcare wont care about you. No more "help" as they put it.
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